01-16-2006, 12:49 PM
Hi, here my author's topic. You can post your comments on my lemons here. To read them, just search Doom in the lemon section or click on this link http://digiartistsdomain.org/lemons/doom/
Doom's lemons: post your comment here!
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01-16-2006, 12:49 PM
Hi, here my author's topic. You can post your comments on my lemons here. To read them, just search Doom in the lemon section or click on this link http://digiartistsdomain.org/lemons/doom/
01-16-2006, 12:57 PM
So, what do you think about my first lemon? How do you find it, what do you like/don't like, suggestion, what about my writting style, ... Remember that SaberGatomon corrected my lemon.
I will make a series with Foxie and Dom. For now I'm working on the third (6800 words and I am to the 2/3 of the chapter) BTW, I submitted my second chapter (better than the first) 4-5 days ago and it is not posted.
01-16-2006, 02:42 PM
Quote:Death to all Renamon!This lemon got great reviews on the DHZ, but you're right, the fact that it's a Renamon lemon immediately disqualifies it from being remotely satisfactory. "I looked up and saw you; I know that you saw me. We froze but for a moment In empathy."-Rise Against
01-17-2006, 02:46 AM
I'm afraid that the style couldn't really hold me. I closed it after the Leomon; I'm not really that good with series three, those stories never hold me. The tenses were rather odd. He was having a flashback with future tenses? It mkes no grammatical sense! Also, "I would have my cellular on me"? Usually, that's followed with an "if". No-one talks like that; it's "I'll have my cell."
The business of the the page shocked me when I loaded it up. It really is awfully busy with it's lines, big titles and such. But what I did love was the indent. Hurrah! I'm always happy to see an indent online. People neglect them, now-a-days. Thanks for brightening my day slightly by assuring me all hope isn't lost for the indent, even if it might be for conventional tenses.
05-25-2006, 07:34 PM
What happened? What's with the sudden hatred of Renamon?
I guess we are... kinda overloaded with her...
07-07-2006, 07:50 PM
Gunter VanCrimson Wrote:What happened? What's with the sudden hatred of Renamon? Heh, too much of a good thing I guess but yeah, it is soooo very easy to right about Rena, she brings little to the table after some 100+ stories and pictures, we have seen her in ever position wearing every different piece of clothing, and acting out every personality we gave her only Renatamer really did a good job with Rena, I guess we could say Rover did too but he's Red Rover, we would read anything he wrote just because |
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