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08-10-2006, 02:19 PM
Here's the review for the whole Chapter 2!

MISTER BIG T Wrote:Melisa looked at her young, beautiful daughter play with a doll. Her long, beautiful, dark hair waved in air when she played with the doll

Here, I'd rather change the second ''doll.'' for: "Toy."

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Sagas of Elements? - by MISTER BIG T - 07-26-2006, 04:38 AM
[No subject] - by DragonMasterX - 07-27-2006, 02:13 AM
[No subject] - by MISTER BIG T - 07-27-2006, 11:24 PM
[No subject] - by DragonMasterX - 07-27-2006, 11:27 PM
[No subject] - by MISTER BIG T - 07-28-2006, 07:04 AM
[No subject] - by DragonMasterX - 08-10-2006, 02:19 PM
[No subject] - by MISTER BIG T - 08-13-2006, 08:31 PM
[No subject] - by Nate Hunter - 08-14-2006, 03:55 AM
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[No subject] - by Nate Hunter - 08-15-2006, 12:15 PM
[No subject] - by MISTER BIG T - 08-15-2006, 03:13 PM
[No subject] - by Nate Hunter - 08-16-2006, 11:53 PM
[No subject] - by MISTER BIG T - 08-23-2006, 04:02 PM