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The Unpublished Works of Mullen.
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You had another great opening to the first one. I think this was your best set of lines:
"Minors aren't allowed to read this sort of thing, as it contains scenes of a mummy and daddy nature, like that night you found daddy lying on top of mummy to keep her warm, although she could have just put some clothes on. Strange are the ways of mummies and daddies."

"Always wear a seatbelt." I like the way this was thrown in.

Your writing starts to unravel a bit towards the end. You may have been well served to cut it off where you did.

As for "Fluff," well, your title pretty much says it all. What you said about German butterflies was kind of cute.
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The Unpublished Works of Mullen. - by Herr Mullen - 07-17-2006, 01:04 AM
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