04-11-2006, 02:57 PM
well i am trying and maybe I should post it here too...... I am making a poem booklet soon too....But thats a work in progress....
and Anti-Wisemon your poetry seems to lack
1> rhythm
2> texture
3> word choice.
4> structure
5> orignality
6> metaphor
7> story within a story
8> suspension of disbelief
9> one good line
10 regularity
No offense but your poem is not that well worded and it should be fixed and maybe you'll have something......
Good luck and a poet takes skill.... and a lot more than boostingabout a work that feels unfinished
and Anti-Wisemon your poetry seems to lack
1> rhythm
2> texture
3> word choice.
4> structure
5> orignality
6> metaphor
7> story within a story
8> suspension of disbelief
9> one good line
10 regularity
No offense but your poem is not that well worded and it should be fixed and maybe you'll have something......
Good luck and a poet takes skill.... and a lot more than boostingabout a work that feels unfinished
