Sinful Shadows (Rape fic, Izumi/Duskmon)

[Fist of Fate]

By the way, I always try to improve a little every time I write a story...so it'd be great if someone could point out exactly what I need to improve upon and why. I get more from criticism than praise. ^^

Your writing style is great; I just don't like stories where people get raped, especially the female lead in my own series. You see, since I base all of my own writing somewhat on my life, I take every well written story as something that's actually happening in some world. When someone's about to be raped, and I know about it, I feel it's my heroic duty to stop it. Being unable to stop it makes me feel helpless. Does that clarify my opinion? Take comfort in knowing that you wrote well enough to make me take it seriously, occuring in my fictional world.

I see. Well...in the very least, be comforted by the fact that Kouichi was remorseful in the end and the story led to a tearful, comforting embrace. It's kind of symbolic.

Izumi: Rape victim

Duskmon: Rapist

Tomoki, Takuya, Junpei, and Koji: Rape victim's friends and family

Kouichi: Fellow rape victim in which the original victim finds comfort and closure, similar to a support group.

Of course, there are key differences. It's only a light metaphor, as Kouichi had to deal with raping Izumi rather than being raped himself. Of course...it may also be interpreted differently as Kouichi being the rapist, and the corrupted Spirit of Darkness being some form of alcohol or drug that altered his mind.

At any rate...there was closure! I might even do a follow-up fic with Izumi and Kouichi as the couple. Concensul this time, of course.