Sinful Shadows (Rape fic, Izumi/Duskmon)

[Wisemon]

By the way, I always try to improve a little every time I write a story...so it'd be great if someone could point out exactly what I need to improve upon and why. I get more from criticism than praise. ^^

Your writing style is great; I just don't like stories where people get raped, especially the female lead in my own series. You see, since I base all of my own writing somewhat on my life, I take every well written story as something that's actually happening in some world. When someone's about to be raped, and I know about it, I feel it's my heroic duty to stop it. Being unable to stop it makes me feel helpless. Does that clarify my opinion? Take comfort in knowing that you wrote well enough to make me take it seriously, occuring in my fictional world.