07-25-2004, 02:48 PM
Excellent! The storyline was great! I must agree, however, with the others who have posted. Punctuation was kind of off, and the asterisks were really unnecessary. But I do not agree with the person who did not like the spacing between paragraphs. This is just my opinion, but I think it makes the stories easier to read. So. Are you gonna make a series? I think you should. I've RPed with someone recently, and that gave me an idea for a whole new series! But it'll have to be after the next one, I promised everyone a straight series. Well, keep up the good work! Da WOLFE