04-09-2004, 10:04 PM
Hmm, you have talent and a nice writing style... Not bad! :D A word of advice though, a new line of dialogue should always be put into a new paragraph. Instead of
"Oh...well, what is your name?" "Shadow will do." "Ah, Shadow. Well, I was kinda wondering why you are sitting here curled up in a little ball."
write
"Oh...well, what is your name?"
"Shadow will do."
"Ah, Shadow. Well, I was kinda wondering why you are sitting here curled up in a little ball."
That makes things easier to read, and is generally accepted as the standard. ^^
"Oh...well, what is your name?" "Shadow will do." "Ah, Shadow. Well, I was kinda wondering why you are sitting here curled up in a little ball."
write
"Oh...well, what is your name?"
"Shadow will do."
"Ah, Shadow. Well, I was kinda wondering why you are sitting here curled up in a little ball."
That makes things easier to read, and is generally accepted as the standard. ^^