03-07-2004, 08:07 AM
I appreciate constructive criticism, such as grammar mistakes, spelling errors, tips on character development and such. However, blatant flames will end with my making fun of you. Hikari suggested that i have put the character too far out. But in fact i only offered a more detailed version of the characters. The daisuke in the show and the daisuke in my story are not far apart, and could coexist if allowed. The fact that you obviously do not understand the concept of fanfics amazes me Hikari. In such fictional erotic works we authors are encouraged to add spices to the original series. Or else what would be the point of it all? if we stick strictly to the implied peronalities of the show, what would be the joy in reading these fanfics? they would just be little kids screwing the crap outa each other. and frankly, i for one am tired of those bad lemons. I try in this lemon to explain a very complicated person, his way of thinking, and the reasons WHY they are screwing the crap outa each other. If you do not have the intelligence or patience to enjoy such substantial works, and only like the ones where only a sex scene (however bizarre or descriptive) occurrs, then i suggest that you stop reading my lemon any further and refrain from coming into this thread again. for i can assure you that despite your efforts to try to change this lemon, you will not accomplish your goal. The stroy will continue as i see fit, and if you have a problem with that, then i suggest that you can do to yourself some of the lucrative things from the many artless lemons around.
P.S.
Incur not my wrath, for my retribution will be swift and terrible.
P.S.
Incur not my wrath, for my retribution will be swift and terrible.