The Shadow of a Love (my first lemon, be nice guys ^_^)
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The Shadow of a Love (my first lemon, be nice guys ^_^)
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03-03-2004, 09:32 AM
Hmm, good start. You have a nice writing style, and the text has a good flow to it. As for the trick at the start -- you did pull that of very well. I actually read Wisemon's post before actually reading the story, and it still got me by surprise. In fact, I was actually already planning on criticising you for the first bit being so clich
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The Shadow of a Love (my first lemon, be nice guys ^_^) - by AnironUndomiel - 03-02-2004, 12:32 PM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-02-2004, 12:50 PM
[No subject] - by UnknownH - 03-02-2004, 03:56 PM
[No subject] - by Wisemon - 03-03-2004, 07:16 AM
[No subject] - by urban dream - 03-03-2004, 09:32 AM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-04-2004, 04:59 AM
[No subject] - by Wisemon - 03-04-2004, 09:53 AM
[No subject] - by UnknownH - 03-04-2004, 03:29 PM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-04-2004, 04:10 PM
[No subject] - by UnknownH - 03-05-2004, 02:27 PM
[No subject] - by Wisemon - 03-05-2004, 03:34 PM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-06-2004, 05:17 PM
[No subject] - by Hikari Yagami Kamiya - 03-06-2004, 08:57 PM
[No subject] - by urban dream - 03-07-2004, 01:34 AM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-07-2004, 04:13 AM
[No subject] - by mowgly - 03-07-2004, 05:25 AM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-07-2004, 08:07 AM
[No subject] - by Wisemon - 03-07-2004, 11:54 AM
[No subject] - by UnknownH - 03-07-2004, 04:44 PM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-07-2004, 04:52 PM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-08-2004, 05:03 PM
[No subject] - by Wisemon - 03-08-2004, 07:17 PM
[No subject] - by Hikari Yagami Kamiya - 03-08-2004, 10:12 PM
[No subject] - by urban dream - 03-08-2004, 10:53 PM
[No subject] - by Hikari Yagami Kamiya - 03-08-2004, 10:57 PM
[No subject] - by Hikari Yagami Kamiya - 03-08-2004, 10:57 PM
[No subject] - by Hikari Yagami Kamiya - 03-08-2004, 11:15 PM
[No subject] - by Hikari Yagami Kamiya - 03-09-2004, 04:25 AM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-09-2004, 04:57 AM
[No subject] - by Red Mage Dragon Tiamat - 03-09-2004, 05:32 AM
[No subject] - by urban dream - 03-09-2004, 07:59 AM
[No subject] - by Wisemon - 03-09-2004, 07:59 AM
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[No subject] - by Red Mage Dragon Tiamat - 03-10-2004, 06:10 AM
[No subject] - by AnironUndomiel - 03-10-2004, 03:03 PM
[No subject] - by Wisemon - 03-10-2004, 03:32 PM
[No subject] - by MISTER BIG T - 03-17-2004, 02:04 AM
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