11-15-2006, 06:06 AM
T gets the Contest.
To judge. i'll post comments and marks here, from each judge, and do a mean total for each.
[quote=Crimson Fox]_Show me that Courage_
Plot: 11/20 (Dream sequences aren
To judge. i'll post comments and marks here, from each judge, and do a mean total for each.
I Wrote:First off, Show Me That Courage. The second paragraph seems very clumsy. I'm sure words have been missed out.
"...Until then..."? That's tensual nonsence.
"Felt herself different..." Differently. And even then, contextually, that makes no sence. "Felt herself being split into throusands of tiny binery codes each being reassembled into a digital format" might sound a little better. The slightly clumsy wording marrs this peice, as well as the clishe coupling. The story itself isn't bad, but it's not brilliant, either. Renamon seems slightly out of character: When did she become such a pervert?
Plot: 14/20
Character: 13/20
Lemon: 14/20
Quality: 16/20
Semantics: 14/20.
Total: 71/100.
Man with the Green Umbrella. I have my sickbag at hand.
Well, thankfully it wasn't as discriptive as I'd thought, however this does her Big T's score. The villians were not made enough of. There was no build up nor hint to their plan, nor motive until they blurted it all out at the end. TK and Kari seemed out of character, however I matched the other characters and their voices perfectly. Unfortunately, there wasn't enough of them to justify a high character score. The sex scene had the porno syndrome of virgins being bedroom gods, and wasn't very discriptive anyway.
Plot: 12/20
Character: 9/20
Lemon: 9/20
Quality: 10/20
Semantics: 18/20
Total: 58/100
[quote=Crimson Fox]_Show me that Courage_
Plot: 11/20 (Dream sequences aren