07-18-2003, 10:06 AM
I am soo sorry to all of you. I just moved out of state for college and only now being set up in my apartment. I don't even have my computer back yet >< So I'm using the lab.
Anyways, I apologize for the long delay, here's the results of my contest.
Questioning Thyself
Lord Archive
Plot: 20
I was very pleased with the way Archive got the story going, it made sense, and it was fun to read. Kari's emotional dillema added just the right angst to it, while keeping it from being depressing.
Character Depth: 10
Davis, Kari, everyone was potrayed exactly as they should be, especially Davis reading a little too much into some of Kari's actions ^^;;
Lemon scene: 30
While the thing with the hymen was a little disturbing, the Lemon Scenes overall were fantastic. Definetly some of the better one's I've read. The one where Davis catches Kari after Gym was one of my fav's!
Writing Quality: 10
Beautiful, that's all I can say.
Grammar: 10
I reread the thing three or four times, and I didn't find any grammatical errors.
Daikari Scenes: 20
This was the one I was very impressed in, Kari's reluctance to actually be in a real relationship with Davis was an interesting twist, and the way it was resolved was executed brilliantly. Kudos!
Total Score:100
Sweet as momma's pie
Mr. Big T
Plot: 14
It was kinda... well, PWP. I mean, the story was really just Davis and Kari having sex. I guess the biggest plot point was when his mom came in, and then left like it was nothing...
Character Depth: 5
Nope, not even close...
Lemon scene: 20
The Lemon was fairly good, but not anything great. It really just made the characters seem more out of character than anything else.
Writing Quality: 6
I really don't like the script style writing, and it switches between that and a regular narrative.
Grammar: 5
Lots of spelling errors.
Daikari Scenes: 12
I had a hard time with this one, but it really didn't show anything but the basis of a relationship between Davis and Kari, before they started having sex.
Total Score:62
So there you go, since there was only two entries, Archive is the winner, with Mr. Big T coming in second place. I will contact you both asap to get you your prizes.
Once again I would like to apologize for my delay in this contest.
Ja!
Anyways, I apologize for the long delay, here's the results of my contest.
Questioning Thyself
Lord Archive
Plot: 20
I was very pleased with the way Archive got the story going, it made sense, and it was fun to read. Kari's emotional dillema added just the right angst to it, while keeping it from being depressing.
Character Depth: 10
Davis, Kari, everyone was potrayed exactly as they should be, especially Davis reading a little too much into some of Kari's actions ^^;;
Lemon scene: 30
While the thing with the hymen was a little disturbing, the Lemon Scenes overall were fantastic. Definetly some of the better one's I've read. The one where Davis catches Kari after Gym was one of my fav's!
Writing Quality: 10
Beautiful, that's all I can say.
Grammar: 10
I reread the thing three or four times, and I didn't find any grammatical errors.
Daikari Scenes: 20
This was the one I was very impressed in, Kari's reluctance to actually be in a real relationship with Davis was an interesting twist, and the way it was resolved was executed brilliantly. Kudos!
Total Score:100
Sweet as momma's pie
Mr. Big T
Plot: 14
It was kinda... well, PWP. I mean, the story was really just Davis and Kari having sex. I guess the biggest plot point was when his mom came in, and then left like it was nothing...
Character Depth: 5
Nope, not even close...
Lemon scene: 20
The Lemon was fairly good, but not anything great. It really just made the characters seem more out of character than anything else.
Writing Quality: 6
I really don't like the script style writing, and it switches between that and a regular narrative.
Grammar: 5
Lots of spelling errors.
Daikari Scenes: 12
I had a hard time with this one, but it really didn't show anything but the basis of a relationship between Davis and Kari, before they started having sex.
Total Score:62
So there you go, since there was only two entries, Archive is the winner, with Mr. Big T coming in second place. I will contact you both asap to get you your prizes.
Once again I would like to apologize for my delay in this contest.
Ja!