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My AU of Red Rover's End Game story
cboy
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09-16-2006, 12:04 PM
Quote:I dislike your main character. He seems too powerful, too Gary Stue, too macho to take on the entire council and Emperor Izzy. I'm looking for an apparent weakness to your character but its not looking to good. No matter how he got these 'abilities', there's too much masculinity to shake a bag at. You can't keep building up strengths and ignoring weaknesses.

Okay, so how about giving me some ideas. I put this story up for judgement, but I also put it up so that I could get some help with making it better. What weaknesses should he have; and he doesn't yet know who all is on the council outside of Epsilon nor is he aware of Izzy's powers yet.
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My AU of Red Rover's End Game story - by cboy - 09-14-2006, 11:13 AM
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[No subject] - by Anonmon - 09-14-2006, 01:28 PM
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[No subject] - by cboy - 09-16-2006, 12:04 PM
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[No subject] - by Wisemon - 09-26-2006, 10:43 AM
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[No subject] - by cboy - 09-26-2006, 12:27 PM
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