Hurrah!
Adverse affects on Iori: great! No-one seems to take into account the bad effects these sex scenes can have on a character. And Circeus has avoided the traditional yaoi storyline, as well, opting for something much more relivant to Iori.
Armadilomon is a crafty little git: he knows Iori so well he can scheame about these things. This is something that usually happens during early, unorthodox homosexual encounters. At least one goes silent, whilst the other is left plotting how to get the other into bed. Iori actually has my sympathies.
Now, there's an acknoledgement that it is inter-species, and that, as such, certain things aren't going to be the same. But, I can't help but wonder what the author has based Armadilomon's antatomy on. What's the inspiration for something so strange, comparativly? Has Circeus been looking into actual armadilos?
I never enjoy the acknoledgement of a penis's other perpose: it just kills the mood for me. But it's great to see Iori's common sence come into conflict with his uncommon experience.
I see Cercius has taken my commens on board: sensations, as well as actions. And good sensations, too: metaphor and all sorts of devices.
Now, this is great: Amadilomon has faults, too. And he has problems: he isn't just a thing that wants Iori to tend to his motivations. That's fantastic, really. And Iori's displaying his analyitical side: this is why he has the Digimental of Knowledge. Not because he knows things, like Yolei, but because he has the ability to enquire. He would have sat back and watched quite a lot over the years. I daresay there is no-one with a better insight into group dymamics, other than, perhaps, Ken.
This second scene displays less of the "sensation" thing I've been recommending, and it does detract slightly into becoming a list of events: not quite, though.
Armadillomon's snore is a nice touch and a fine conclusion. I rather liked this one.
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Good point. I just noticed the shift actually occurs in mid-paragraph. I'd have to do some expansion before I can break it.
Thanks for the pointers!