Destruction series reviews??

[DragonMasterX]

Sorry for the delay Big T, here's the review for the fourth chapter.

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This progress was for those who were injured badly; the liquid would help them regenerate faster

The word here is actually: "Process."

Before Veedramon could ponder this any longer, all the lights suddenly went out. Suddenly

I wouldn't use "suddenly" twice, poor characters would soon suffer heart attacks.

Immediately the four Biyomon's blinked their eyes, as they digivolved into Garudamons who flied

The verb you want to use here is: "flew", Fly is an irregular verb.

[quote]"Is it the girl that makes you not give in to your desire of power?" Silvermon questioned, leaping towards Gatomon and lifting her up from her neck.

[MISTER BIG T]

It's somewhat an extra, reading it isn't neccesity.

[DragonMasterX]

Very well, I will review the 5th chapter of Destruction then, let's see what we have here...

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Patamon, realizing now was the chance, brought his knife into sight. He moved forward and slashed at Luciantmon couple of times, who dodged the slashes. Then, suddenly Patamon jumped straight over Luciantmon and turned 180 degrees in the air and as Luciantmon was still turning, he stabbed the knife straight into the guts of Luciantmon.

I've got a doubt, if Luciantmon is literally a giant, then how is that Patamon's knife actually can pierce all that muscle and skin and trespass to his guts? Moreover, just how much can that Patamon jump? I think it'd be too high for him.

[quote]"Is

[MISTER BIG T]

I've got a doubt, if Luciantmon is literally a giant, then how is that Patamon's knife actually can pierce all that muscle and skin and trespass to his guts? Moreover, just how much can that Patamon jump? I think it'd be too high for him.

In case you didn't get it, the knife didn't pierce as it only broke. Also Luciantmon isn't literally a giant, so an agile Digimon (in this case, Patamon) could jump over him.

Err... Hadn't Silvermon devolved into Redmon before this?

He re evolved soon after Gatomon appeared.

Notes: You are getting better at last, maybe you could boost your score if you indeed added something else for the porn, not something purely gorey including a body getting ripped apart by an humongous cock; I know it's part of the story, but besides that, you could also write another scene with the SANE characters you still have. Good job with this chapter :3

No one is sane in this series. Not even the "good guys". :D

[DragonMasterX]

He stood at the size of Imperialdramon and he had dark blue skin and dark yellow glowing eyes. Smoke blew from his huge nostrils as he tilted his head and squeezed his eyes slightly while observing his brother.

Imperialdramon is literally a giant.

He re evolved soon after Gatomon appeared.

And that's why I say everything happens out of spontaniety.

No one is sane in this series. Not even the "good guys". :D

Lol, that I notice :P

[DragonMasterX]

Let's get on with the 6th chapter already!

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[quote=MISTER BIG T]Luciantmon was so near that he could almost feel the humans

[MISTER BIG T]

Awww thank you. :D

[DragonMasterX]

Don't thank me yet, Chapter 7 is ahead.

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[quote=MISTER BIG T]Gabrielmon moved his head towards her inner thigh, licking it and then moved his head so he was able to lick her pussy. He lapped at the cunt of Angelissamon, beginning to make her wet. Soon, Gabrielmon rose up and rubbed his penis against the entrance of her cunt before entering inside. Slowly he began to pump into Angelissamon

[MISTER BIG T]

Yeah, I've gotten complaints of the lemon scene before. I'd remove it but the plot almost calls for it.


I hope you'll enjoy the blood curling finale. :D

[DragonMasterX]

Yeah, I've gotten complaints of the lemon scene before. I'd remove it but the plot almost calls for it.

My dear friend, you don't have to remove the Lemon scene. You yourself seem to point out they indeed are lovers in those angelical forms, so even they are planning the world's destruction by having sex (ironic), they should have their moment of care, love and passion, wouldn't you agree? So, you don't need to remove this even if the whole story depended on it, you just have to improve it.

And now, Chapter 8.

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They were fighting for who gets to* go and butcher the Digimon inside it first. But as they got inside a single Digimon eating on some food*2 greeted them. It was Silvermon.

*-If you started in past, then you should continue in past so it ends: "They were fighting for who got to,"

*2-If you want to use ''on'' then you shouldn't use: ''Eat.'' as the main verb, but: "Munching." or "Chewing." If not, then remove "On." from the sentence.

The first human started to run towards Silvermon and slashed his right hand towards Silvermon who easily dodged it.

You could vary, so it sounds better. Use any of these examples to replace the name of Silvermon: "Digimon.", "Dragon.", "His enemy.", "The foe." or even: "His possible meal."

[quote=MISTER BIG T]Silvermon smiled and tossed the bowl into air and pushed both of his hands index and middle fingers into the human