08-20-2011, 01:52 AM
I'm still trying to figure out how stabbing someone in the heart and twist-wrenching the sword out rips the insides out unless the sword was hooked or serrated or something, but it is delightfully violent! My only critique is that there is quite a lack of description, emotion-wise and action-wise, as I have yet to see much of a complete paragraph. There are a lot of one liner sentences arranged in small groups, but it is thankfully easy to read!
The content is quite nice. I'm starting to see an inkling of a plot here. So the prince runs away and proclaims himself 'banished', and his adventures begin?
The content is quite nice. I'm starting to see an inkling of a plot here. So the prince runs away and proclaims himself 'banished', and his adventures begin?
![[Image: self_centered_coyote_by_kerol-d2zmoca.png]](http://i1223.photobucket.com/albums/dd505/Frisky_E_Coyote/Frisk%20Me/self_centered_coyote_by_kerol-d2zmoca.png)
"I don't suffer from insanity, I enjoy every minute of it!"
