Savior of the Universe!

[Frisk E. Coyote]

I think it was very well written, and I see the makings of a plot in progress. I'm also getting a semblance of the characters' personalities, and that's very important to me, because I'm not very fond of flat characters who are there simply because the plot- or lack thereof- calls for it. I like that there are relationships established between each character, like Ryan's hatred for his father, his father's desire and pain for his son's company, the way Ryan views Aaron, and all that.

Please keep writing! ^ ^ I'd love to see what happens next!