11-14-2008, 09:27 AM
The title and the plot have nothing to do, to start with. Gatomon doesn't die, and she isn't even curious, just horny. Your plot doesn't look like bad though, with a nice title change it might just work.
Also, about what I'd like to see if you write it, try using, first of all, a good spell checker, maybe a beta reader. Second, work on your grammar, it hurts my eyes.
Also, about what I'd like to see if you write it, try using, first of all, a good spell checker, maybe a beta reader. Second, work on your grammar, it hurts my eyes.