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I'm looking for some plot inspiration for a lemon series I'm working on. I have most of the first story plot done I'm just looking for some help on what you people would like to see.

Story one plot
Story 01: Curiosity killed the Gatomon
Plot: While on their way to the top of Spral mountian the digidestineed are attacked by an oddly smart group of garbagemon who manage to steal the digivises of Tai, Matt, Sora, And Mimi, leaving only The others able to fight. After the battle the digidestined who had their digivises stolen went off to search, with those who didn't, for the garbagemon that managed to get away. Leaving Tk and Kari to watch camp. Being a bit cruriest about why Tk was wanting to be by himself he told Kari that he wanted to help the other but did not know how. During their conversation on what they could do to help the others, Gatomon and Patamon were engaging in a bit of sex. After a round of sex the rest of the gang comes back with their digivises and they continue on their quest oblivious of what Patamon and Gatomon did.

So rate the plot for this story and help me gain some inspiration for the others.

The title and the plot have nothing to do, to start with. Gatomon doesn't die, and she isn't even curious, just horny. Your plot doesn't look like bad though, with a nice title change it might just work.

Also, about what I'd like to see if you write it, try using, first of all, a good spell checker, maybe a beta reader. Second, work on your grammar, it hurts my eyes.

What do you mean by grammer?

Quote:What do you mean by grammer?

Um... I don't understand... And sorry for misspelling grammar.

I quoted that sentence to emphasize that you need a lot of work into typing words correctly and with proper spelling. I'll bold all your mispellings for instance now so you'll get a more direct concept of what I'm talking about:

Quote:Plot: While on their way to the top of Spral mountian the digidestineed are attacked by an oddly smart group of garbagemon who manage to steal the digivises of Tai, Matt, Sora, And Mimi, leaving only The others able to fight. After the battle the digidestined who had their digivises stolen went off to search, with those who didn't, for the garbagemon that managed to get away. Leaving Tk and Kari to watch camp. Being a bit cruriest about why Tk was wanting to be by himself he told Kari that he wanted to help the other but did not know how. During their conversation on what they could do to help the others, Gatomon and Patamon were engaging in a bit of sex. After a round of sex the rest of the gang comes back with their digivises and they continue on their quest oblivious of what Patamon and Gatomon did.

There are some more mistakes with tenses and punctuation, but I'm too lazy to correct everywhere.

The words in bold are mispelled, the ones in italics are minor mistakes, like in "other" where you ate up an S at the end to reflect you're talking about the gang that's not there.

It is actually the rough, and I mean rough, plot to the first story. The series, please dont correct me as I am starting to get anyoed by that, plot is still under construction with the first story already started.

(11-14-2008, 02:04 PM)Kundral Wrote: [ -> ]It is actually the rough, and I mean rough, plot to the first story. The series, please dont correct me as I am starting to get anyoed by that, plot is still under construction with the first story already started.

*raises hand* Can I say something <.< >.> ^^ Thanks, lol.

I was just wanting to say that corrections are supposed to help you learn how to improve, not to annoy, so that you don't make too many mistakes and have whoever is reading your story to stop reading halfway only because the writer is using bad grammar in his words. However, I agree with DMX. The plot is good, but the title doesn't match it. Maybe something like... Taking out the Garbagemon or something along with what the plot of the story is.