12-30-2006, 12:12 PM
Out of all those little pieces, I think I enjoyed your "anonymous" disclaimer the most.
As for the big fic, I wasn't a fan of the instant messenger scenes, too hard to read. The rest of it was fairly enjoyable (I skipped over the parts I found icky).
You did a good job getting down a messy room for Daisuke, his possible jealousies, all that stuff. You did an okay job on Koushiro, though the real key to him is scientific terms. Everybody else was decent. I had some believability issues with parts of it, especially the doorbell.
Well, that's about all I want to say on this one. I'm getting hemorrhoids from my sit-up routine, but it's worth it if I can get those tuned abs.
As for the big fic, I wasn't a fan of the instant messenger scenes, too hard to read. The rest of it was fairly enjoyable (I skipped over the parts I found icky).
You did a good job getting down a messy room for Daisuke, his possible jealousies, all that stuff. You did an okay job on Koushiro, though the real key to him is scientific terms. Everybody else was decent. I had some believability issues with parts of it, especially the doorbell.
Well, that's about all I want to say on this one. I'm getting hemorrhoids from my sit-up routine, but it's worth it if I can get those tuned abs.
"I looked up and saw you;
I know that you saw me.
We froze but for a moment
In empathy."-Rise Against