02-05-2004, 02:38 AM
That might just be the most successfully artistic piece of writing I've ever seen on this site (except for pieces of my own). You had some great word choices. It was poetic; it was sexy. Most importantly, your style was original. If you could take your style and use it for some longer work, like some stories that include sex but aren't just sex, you'll quickly become one of the elite lemon writers.
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"I looked up and saw you;
I know that you saw me.
We froze but for a moment
In empathy."-Rise Against