Hey there. Senjuro here. I
I readed it all! I loved it Sen! The sex scene was so descriptive... it was exceptional. The characters were IC all the way! Not to mention this was an excellent plot!
I only saw 2-3 mistakes of tenses (same as I often have), but it WAS JUST GREAT!
I can't give a 10 because it isn't perfect YET, but if I had to grade it... from the start till the end... I'd give you a 9.6
In other words, I loved it senjuro. Good work.
HOLY SHIT- IT TURNED OUT AWESOME!!
DMX: it was 2 am when I posted it, and I'm not submitting it to the site quite yet. There's still another pairing to go. Consider those tense inconsistansies toast when I get back.
GVC: I'm glad you like it so far. I hope the ending bit will tickle your fancy as much.
senjuro Wrote:DMX: it was 2 am when I posted it, and I'm not submitting it to the site quite yet. There's still another pairing to go. Consider those tense inconsistansies toast when I get back.
Another pairing? BWAHAHAHHA!
SO FAR!? THAT'S NOT DONE YET!? SWEET!!
Did I mention I love it already? Did I? Did I? I guess not! I LOVE IT!!!
And I already loved it as it is- imagine the posibilities with another couple... hehehe- hahahaha- muahahah- *cough cough* okay enough...
Did I mention how much of a great author you are- and opera singer- and overall big-brother? GOOD- Cuz I you are now!!
I'm afraid I only read what I could, however what I did read I enjoyed. Good title, by the way, I always hate thinking of titles. I liked the disclaimer too; I always know if I'm in for a treat or not if the disclaimer is well crafted. This was a treat, by the way. Keep on writing.
I said it before when you asked me what I geninely thought of it and tried to edit it as best I could that It was well written. I enjoyed a lot of the simplier things with the inner narraration and as well as the characters chosen. Senjuro, it was very good and if I could help you out once I again, I would be happy....or better yet, honored to do so.....