02-04-2006, 06:56 AM
02-05-2006, 07:04 PM
Blue Rover sent me a nice Chapter, so i had to write something..
I wrote this about 15 minutes ago :?
Enjoy
In Spite of Rapture..
Chapter1: My Consolable Moonlight
By: Felidire
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The cool evening breeze rushed against Gatomon
I wrote this about 15 minutes ago :?
Enjoy
In Spite of Rapture..
Chapter1: My Consolable Moonlight
By: Felidire
_______________________________
The cool evening breeze rushed against Gatomon
02-05-2006, 10:57 PM
hurrah for spelling and grammar! However, "..." in narrative never seems to work for me when it is used too often. I prefer commas. The story itself leaves the reader asking "what is ing on?" Always an incentive to read on. Quite a nice, short little peice.
02-06-2006, 08:36 PM
seriously if i use any more commas, the readers' eyes will hemorrhage; i've actually had to revert to using semi-colons again, because of my excessive comma usage. xD
lol
lol
02-07-2006, 11:34 AM
yay! i'm inspiring! that was a nice piece too.
me: ha! i told you commas would take over teh world,,,,!,,,,!,,,,!,,,,,,,,,,
bob (my sholder devil): hey nathen wheres my money!!!
nathen (my sholder angel): hiding in basment: i'm not here!!!
bob: takes out bazooka: i have a permit for this. FIRE!
TBC. I forgot to tell you I am very, very evil with cliffies . oh, and have a nice day. Muhahahahahahahahahahahaahahahahahaaaaaaaa!
me: ha! i told you commas would take over teh world,,,,!,,,,!,,,,!,,,,,,,,,,
bob (my sholder devil): hey nathen wheres my money!!!
nathen (my sholder angel): hiding in basment: i'm not here!!!
bob: takes out bazooka: i have a permit for this. FIRE!
TBC. I forgot to tell you I am very, very evil with cliffies . oh, and have a nice day. Muhahahahahahahahahahahaahahahahahaaaaaaaa!
02-09-2006, 07:17 PM
hehe, it's a dream she has in the series thingy i'm writing.
ok.. now you're scaring me more than my future grandchildren.. '.'`
Quote:nathen (my sholder angel): hiding in basment: i'm not here!!!
bob: takes out bazooka: i have a permit for this. FIRE!
TBC. I forgot to tell you I am very, very evil with cliffies . oh, and have a nice day. Muhahahahahahahahahahahaahahahahahaaaaaaaa!
ok.. now you're scaring me more than my future grandchildren.. '.'`
02-09-2006, 07:22 PM
Do mean send you a story or just some random ideas that have popped out of our miniscule little minds.
02-10-2006, 01:30 PM
accually its a joke from school.
sk: a story
sk: a story
02-10-2006, 08:03 PM
if you want to help write this story with us, then id like to see some of your work :)
once i get 9 or so people, we're going to be in a series after the 2nd one, (if we're short we'll have to make some people up) :P
so far blue and I are going to try write it ourselves..
once i get 9 or so people, we're going to be in a series after the 2nd one, (if we're short we'll have to make some people up) :P
so far blue and I are going to try write it ourselves..
02-12-2006, 03:55 AM
anyone?