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A Little Bit of Poetry
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I'm not quite sure how many people on this site like poetry, but just in case you do, here's a poem I spontaneously spawned a couple of days ago while sitting in my English class. I enjoy poetry and I want to share it with other people, so here goes:

The Twilight is the Best of Times

Crystal shines
when daylight breaks
as rays of Sun
burst through the clouds
'Tis the light my crystal takes.

When night befalls my little town,
and the moon peers through the black,
and sends envoys of ghostly light
to shatter the stars at the speed of sound,
and take my crystal's shine back.

When twilight dawns on my little town,
surrounding buildings with orange and gold-
Both colors side by side,
and my crystal has the faintest glow,
a peaceful glow that puts my heart to rest.
It's only because that time of day
is when the Sun and the Moon coincide.

Oh how I wish my town to be twilight
with everyone gathered 'round,
on our way to Tranquility,
the people of the Sun and the people of the Moon
dancing across the ground-
Together.

But what's most important to me is my crystal,
and the twilight makes it the most glad,
and there is something about my crystal-
It's feelings are pervasive and spread
to those with pure mind and cleansed heart,
like me,
and I want them to feel joy, not dread.

I wouldn't mind hearing what you thought of it by the way! =3

Oh, and here's another one I made up today.^^

How I Wish to Fly

I gaze up at the dark, abysmal sky
with the ethereal moon aglowing.
How I long, I yearn, I wish to fly
with the clusters of stars that are showing.

How I wish to commute with the fluffiest clouds
so delicate to the touch.
I wish not to land amongst the earthen crowds,
for I would pine the cirrus too much.

Why were birds gifted with wings
when they do not deign to use them?
Through the air they soar, what freedom clings,
while to the ground I am condemned.

I blink my eyes, snap out of my daze
with my thoughts buzzing 'round my head.
I know one day my spirit will reach the Sun's rays,
and float through the skies when I'm dead.

And there you have it folks. I would still appreciate some opinions, please! =3 I hope you enjoyed them.
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#2
Good job. You put a god amount of feeling into the twilight one. Oh i love the twilight hour. when the new day just begins its not even over.
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#3
I'm surprised you picked it out, Ryan =3 The Twilight one was the one I put my heart into the most...The second one is the one I actually thought about...For the Twilight one, I just picked up my pencil and started writing, and soon I had a marvelous, uplifting poem...I actually surprised myself with that one...I love the twilight as much as the next person...You've got a good head on your shoulders, Ryan....Thanks for giving me your opinion....I always enjoy other people who enjoy poetry. =3
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#4
The pencil speaks the mind. Not the mouth XD. Every bit of words make a new story and every story unfolds onto a new mystery. Never alas the fact that there is always a different way to express yourself. Keep up the good work man!
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#5
I luved it!its so wonderful!
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#6
Amazing I love it! I prefer twilight.
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#7
Thank you all very much =3 I'm thinking about writing a bunch of poems and then getting them published in an anthology. I might keep posting them here to get some opinions. So...look forward to some more poetry^^
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#8
Awsome. I'm a poet myself but I usualy do hikus. Forgive the spelling. Like my most famous one at school:

Night turns to the day
Time slowly passes by, never stopping once
My life continues to exist
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#9
I really love that haiku, but I thought haikus followed a 5-7-5 syllable count...=3
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#10
It was an experimental haiku. I had it as words not syllables.
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