A short poem..

[Chaotic Phoenix]

Here's another one of mine, only ths one I did a few days ago. I just started typing and it came to me...

Passionate Hearts...

Fire's are lit,
Passions are aflame,
Lost spirits wander,
In search for a name;

One from the earth,
One from the air,
Two find each other,
Lives their life without despair;

One from the water,
One from the clouds,
Helps out a wounded friend,
Cries in sadness, but without any doubt;

Alit are the flames that bind,
And entertwines our lives,
Look out for one another,
And protect your friend,
With joy and kindness,
From the heart within.

[Wisemon]

If you're going to write poetry that's trying to seem metered, you might as well give it a consistent meter. It's not terribly hard.

[Chaotic Phoenix]

[quote=Wisemon]
If you're going to write poetry that's trying to seem metered, you might as well give it a consistent meter.

[Wisemon]

Hmm... I think I see what you mean... The 4th set is what you were refering to right? Where two more lines were added?

I had it all together, no spaces inbetween, but again I keep thinking that all poems are like that. ::sigh:: Well, I'm still learning.

What? I'm talking about meter; you know, iambs and trochees? Soft and strong stresses? What you wrote had a wildly inconsistent meter. Here's the scansion:

Fire's are lit,
Passions are aflame,
Lost spirits wander,
In search for a name;

strong/soft/soft/strong
strong/soft/strong/soft/strong
strong/strong/soft/strong/soft
soft/strong/strong/soft/strong

One from the earth,
One from the air,
Two find each other,
Lives their life without despair;

strong/strong/soft/strong
strong/strong/soft/strong
strong/strong/soft/strong/soft
strong/soft/strong/soft/strong/soft/strong

One from the water,
One from the clouds,
Helps out a wounded friend,
Cries in sadness, but without any doubt;

strong/strong/soft/strong/soft
strong/strong/soft/strong
strong/strong/soft/strong/soft/strong
strong/soft/strong/soft/strong/soft/strong/strong/soft/strong

Alright, I'm cutting this short, but do you get the idea?

[Niyara]

I didn't understand even half of that Wise.. lol... I guess thats why I nearly failed the poetry unit in english :P

[Chaotic Phoenix]

... Alright, I'm cutting this short, but do you get the idea?

??? No... I never had that explained to me like that before.

[Wisemon]

??? No... I never had that explained to me like that before.

Just do what I did. Take a poetry class in college with a hardass professor who takes it seriously and only gives out one A per class. Guess who got the A.

[Chaotic Phoenix]

I read the poem in conjuction with what you were explaining Wisemon, and I think I can see the pattern inside it, where what is strong and what is soft... I still have a long way to go though...

[blueeyedgabulvo0o]

Wise what did you think about my poem? >>l;

[Wisemon]

Wise what did you think about my poem? >>l;

Sorry, I think I must've missed it.

It's pretty good, definitely the best one in this thread, but more importantly, it's vague. I think you wouldn't have too much trouble finding a publisher.