[AOTM] September Contest: by Herr Mullen

[Herr Mullen]

Submit it via the usual channels. It'll be up there eventually.

I'm afraid Nate hasn't told anyone September's winners. I have no idea when (or weather) he'll release them. So, judges, if you could send in your reveiws for the September contest as well, I'll calculate the winner without Nate's judgement.

[MISTER BIG T]

So when are YOU going to tell October winners? :roll:

[Herr Mullen]

So when are YOU going to tell October winners? :roll:

Nate is not the only other one with responcibilities away from a moniter, however they will be released by Sunday at latest.

[Wisemon]

Nate is not the only other one with responcibilities away from a moniter

That sounded a little sarcastic and misspelled. Well, it didn't sound misspelled.

[Herr Mullen]

Well, it may be a little while later, yet.

In unrelated news, can I have a volenteer for the next contest? I'll give them the email and password to the account and they can do this month's contest.

[MISTER BIG T]

Oooh pick me, pick me! I'll make a nice contest... :D

[Herr Mullen]

T gets the Contest.

To judge. i'll post comments and marks here, from each judge, and do a mean total for each.

First off, Show Me That Courage. The second paragraph seems very clumsy. I'm sure words have been missed out.

"...Until then..."? That's tensual nonsence.

"Felt herself different..." Differently. And even then, contextually, that makes no sence. "Felt herself being split into throusands of tiny binery codes each being reassembled into a digital format" might sound a little better. The slightly clumsy wording marrs this peice, as well as the clishe coupling. The story itself isn't bad, but it's not brilliant, either. Renamon seems slightly out of character: When did she become such a pervert?

Plot: 14/20
Character: 13/20
Lemon: 14/20
Quality: 16/20
Semantics: 14/20.
Total: 71/100.

Man with the Green Umbrella. I have my sickbag at hand.

Well, thankfully it wasn't as discriptive as I'd thought, however this does her Big T's score. The villians were not made enough of. There was no build up nor hint to their plan, nor motive until they blurted it all out at the end. TK and Kari seemed out of character, however I matched the other characters and their voices perfectly. Unfortunately, there wasn't enough of them to justify a high character score. The sex scene had the porno syndrome of virgins being bedroom gods, and wasn't very discriptive anyway.

Plot: 12/20
Character: 9/20
Lemon: 9/20
Quality: 10/20
Semantics: 18/20
Total: 58/100

[quote=Crimson Fox]_Show me that Courage_

Plot: 11/20 (Dream sequences aren

[DragonMasterX]

Show Me That Courage got a mean score of 69.

If I were Gunter, I'd say something else about this, but as I'm not, I'll just say thank you. Never really thought I'd actually win this contest after my... well, fiasco in August, but if I could jump from nearly three to a more or less rounded up seven, then it means I can still improve further more.

Thank you reviewers for being honest again, I appreciate the criticism.

And thanks Herr Mullen for holding October's Contest in place of Nate.

I'll continue writing and keep besting my skills out until I can write something that may be called 'decent'. As for now- I better start thinking of something for January or somewhere near there ^^

[MISTER BIG T]

I am never going to try and make another serious Digimon lemon ever again.(Sorry DMX; hopes of getting another "Unforgiven" just got even weaker than ever) I'll just be writing of Power Puff Girls or just do satires involving plot devices or something. No matter how hard I try and no matter how much back research I do, people always say I'm putting the people out of character. (Especially, since the point of the story was that they were drifting away mentally and were possessed by these feelings. That's why they were sex "goddess") I'm not even as shocked as the fact that the plot got the lowest score, while I thought it was actually the best point of the lemon. :?

Congratulations DMX, I'll add you to the list of author of the months next time I update. So everyone get your Christmas hats going on since that's the theme of the December contest! :D