08-02-2006, 01:04 PM
Wisemon Wrote:I don't think Nate left himself room to continue his series too far, and I'll agree that the story is lacking in advanced literary devices, but for what it is (lighthearted), it's above average.
Thank you, that is what I was going for. I wanted to avoid making the reader think too heavily, and I didn't intend this to go past two, maybe three, chapters, all a bit shorter than my normal caliber -- my standard chapter aims for around 9 pages at the minimum, I'm looking at 5-7 for Play the Game. The culmination will be a DaiSora lemon scene, after the game is over, but in the same chapter that ends it.