07-17-2006, 11:51 PM
Why didn't I notice this place sooner?
BTW; thanks for the review. I'll give a thought to rewriting the opening bit (That WAS my first ever lemon...)
I'm up to chapter 7 now... ( :oops: )
Almost forgot... I tried to make the story flow as much as possible yet I could not avoid the tense switching (I always do that! )
BTW; thanks for the review. I'll give a thought to rewriting the opening bit (That WAS my first ever lemon...)
I'm up to chapter 7 now... ( :oops: )
Almost forgot... I tried to make the story flow as much as possible yet I could not avoid the tense switching (I always do that! )