Crikey

[Cloud]

I have 17- 18 more stories, thats wat took me 3 years, i worked like a work of art

[Cloud]

Woops double post sry bout that, can some delete one plz, ty

[DV85]

I'm usually not one to criticize other people's work but seeing how other people have already brought up the subject I feel I might as well give my thoughts on it. I read the lemon. It didn't look like you put a lot of hard work into it. There was virtually no plot to it, the sex scene was rushed and the sex scene itself was short. Plus it was a crossover. Crossovers are extremely hard to pull off with satisfying results. It really should only be attempted by seasoned veterans of lemon writing and even then its still difficult.

I'm not going to give it a rating in terms of numbers but if I had to choose a correct word for it, I'd select poor. I'm sorry, it's just the way I feel. Wisemon and Unknown H have already said the same thing. You also recently posted that it took yout three years to do about seventeen lemons. Dude, that's really not an accomplishment. I've been writing lemons since 2001 and my count is over two hundred. I'm taking this standpoint as maybe a judge of American Idol.

Simon would probably flat-out insult you but I'm not that kind of person. I consider myself to be more helpful then discouraging. Even though I have not read the other lemons by you, reading the one you already posted gives me a general idea of what to expect. Your lemons need work, lots of work. Try to write at least 10 pages per lemon with 1 page being nothing but sex.

If you're having a hard time or don't even feel like putting that much effort into it I would suggest that you stop right now. Some people are destined lol, to be lemon writers. You can be too although you need to sharpen up your skills. I've done all I can to try and help you out in your situation, the rest is up to you.

[Wisemon]

Dude, that's really not an accomplishment. I've been writing lemons since 2001 and my count is over two hundred. I'm taking this standpoint as maybe a judge of American Idol.

You make for a good judge, but don't waste your time with American Idol. 8)

[UnknownH]

Yes, I agree with that.

[Humon]

my "lemons" if you can call them that (truely, I think not...yet), have no sex in it as of yet. I made several finished copies and none of them are acceptable. it's too "made up" (in a critisizing sence... yes; it's sad to critisize myself on my own story, but I look at it as if I never wrote it which makes my stories be "believable". keep working. you don't have to have the porn in it right away, though it has to have it eventually. take some time to get a feel for your characters, set up their personalities, and be creative. sex scenes are tricky. you can't go too fast, but it gets boring if it's too slow. try to do moderate. tease your characters for a couple stories, and let them go. it'll come to you eventually. have fun.

cheers!
~Humon~

[Cloud]

dv85 i appreciate your criticism, I have been writing but only when i feel like it. I dont like writing sex scenes but when togashi was in control of the site he refused to take my lemons on account of the lack of sex content in the story. I can write amongst some really good plots and even though the story i posted sucked, it was only a quickie and i can write better.

Thank you DV85 for your honesty and i am going to submit my others, they may be crossovers but i have put alot of work into them. My friend polvo has read my stories and thinks they are quiet good. Ill try not to disappoint you lot again but technically im still learning. Thank you :)

[UnknownH]

If you want to put non lemon stories somewhere try fanfiction.net or mediaminer.org with stories here you have to have atleast one story that has lemon content in it.

[Cloud]

Well i put some content into my stories but its only a lil, but the rest is good