my first

[Blue Rover]

I'd like to know if this is good. it's my first attempt at a lemon. it's the first half the sex seane is in the other half. please go easy on the flames.


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[Anonmon]

I would add capitalization and seperate out different topics into their own paragraphs, such as Chronos' childhood.

[Blue Rover]

ya i'll do that. this is an alpha

[Blue Rover]

ok then. here is a redux. for those wondering what this hast to do with digimon, what do you think the white light is?

The Lost Ones: Cronos
By
Blue Rover

Running down a dark ally a little past midnight, Cronos Blackwing, self-banished weapons master of the European house Ki

[Gunter VanCrimson]

8) cool!

[Blue Rover]

thanks! your so awesme :D i'll try to get that second part up a sap

[Gunter VanCrimson]

oooooh! I'm so excited! (jumps up and down enthusiastically)

[Blue Rover]

i'm working on it now. btw your pants are running away. try to keep them on.

[Gunter VanCrimson]

oh crap- was that why it was breezy? come back here you traitors! I need youuuuuuu... *chases after his pants*

[Blue Rover]

wtf! all my work... gone! i sure as hell hope theres a backup or microsoft will be getting a pice of my mind! so help me god...