04-27-2006, 09:20 AM
For Herr Mullen, a quick review of "Moment, Tai":
As always, it has a good introduction. The part where Yamato walks and contemplates bridges is great. A few factual errors: A bass is not a guitar, moumantai means "take it easy." The dialogue got to be a little confusing. A bit more "said/questioned/answered" or corresponding narration would be helpful. The grammar was good, but not perfect. I agree, Taichi is often cheesy. I also agree that yaoi was hinted, even if the characters are supposedly straight. Seems like a closeted thing. Overall, I give this 8.5/10.
As always, it has a good introduction. The part where Yamato walks and contemplates bridges is great. A few factual errors: A bass is not a guitar, moumantai means "take it easy." The dialogue got to be a little confusing. A bit more "said/questioned/answered" or corresponding narration would be helpful. The grammar was good, but not perfect. I agree, Taichi is often cheesy. I also agree that yaoi was hinted, even if the characters are supposedly straight. Seems like a closeted thing. Overall, I give this 8.5/10.
"I looked up and saw you;
I know that you saw me.
We froze but for a moment
In empathy."-Rise Against