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This is a birthday present for my friend. We're just friends, but I'm her only friend. The details of this are in another topic, and I'd rather not go into it. The point is, I put together an awesome poem. It has a very specific syllable and rhyme scheme, and a shit-load of other tricks. To get them all, you'll have to read it a few times. The "chorus" is based on the live version of Rage Against The Machine's "Freedom". I'm posting it here (as opposed to the Author's Domain) because it's non-Digimon, and because nobody visits the Author's Domain.
Your Gift To Yourself
You prefer the company of self.
Maintain it with the greatest of stealth.
I know why you
"I looked up and saw you;
I know that you saw me.
We froze but for a moment
In empathy."-Rise Against
i'm speechless, i haven't read anything this good before...i really don't know what to say other than good fuckin' job wisemon! i love it...and i'm a BIG fan of poetry, there are very few poems that i like, let alone love!
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I just thought I'd let you guys know that my friend loved the poem. I'll release it later as part of a compilation. Also on that compilation will be the following poem, which I based on the sonnet structure (modified) I recently learned about in my poetry class. As far as content, the inspirations were Stabbing Westward and a suggestion from UnknownH. I bet the old ones never had content like this.
Ungod Sonnet
A holy man in black approached one day.
He offered me a book, a book of faith.
Politely told him,
"I looked up and saw you;
I know that you saw me.
We froze but for a moment
In empathy."-Rise Against
hey i write poem! AHEM!
Love and War
I do not know how long I can last without love, purpose, or meaning. My families
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Okay...I don't know who told you otherwise, but using a lot of figurative language doesn't qualify something as a poem. A poem has a defined structure. In fact, that's the first and only thing that separates a poem from regular prose. Maybe there was a defined line or syllable structure there, and maybe I missed it. If you can point it out, go ahead. It's fine to do this here, but in the Author's Domain, as a courtesy, it's not cool to put your own writing on someone else's writing thread.
"I looked up and saw you;
I know that you saw me.
We froze but for a moment
In empathy."-Rise Against
oh man. i feel like a dork. im very sorry for intruding on your happy time er post. please forgive me and um that stuff. and i really like your songs and poetry. its great!
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I think it's more angry then gothy seeing as who he is but that does make sense