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Note: I do not own Pokemon. I do not own Gary Oak, Ash Ketchum, Mewtwo, or Team Rocket. This is a Yaoi RP that has been edited to protect the people who actually did the RP. All children under 18 should not read this, but eh, if you found it good job. Have fun and buy a doggie.
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Title: When the truth must be told. (Gary x Ash)

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Announcer: Now in the final days of the Jhoto League, things are getting tense. Ash has a fight soon and was getting ready when Gary walks in.

*Ash tugged on his gloves* I know I can win this Pikachu.

Yo! Newbie! *Gary grinned, waving at Ash while making his way over, leaning up against the near row of lockers.* Better not lose this match. You're moving up pretty fast, aren't you?

*smirks* Faster then you. Last I heard, you lost your fight.

*Gary couldn't argue with that. It was a given that at some point even the best trainers had their bad days, but he'd taken a rough loss- the competition was stiff here in the finals. Although it hurt to see Ash moving ahead of him in the tournament, he secretly hoped that the boy from his home town would win.* You'd better pay them back for that. Pallet town's honor is riding on your shoulders, Ash.

Oh, I will win Gary. Just to prove I am better then you.

*Gary winced, when had the brat gotten such an attitude?* Yeah, say that again after our next match. *He looked away sharply, glowering at the floor* Don't get cocky, newb. You aren't going up against little kids from the countryside anymore. These are serious trainers. I even heard that Team Rocket snuck some of their best in under the registration procedure.

*Ash laughed a little* Team Rocket is nothing. Trust me. I have beaten them many times.

Yeah, yeah, I heard it before. You're Ash, King of the World. Geez, your head sure swelled a lot. You notice that smell? *He made a face, looking around slowly, waving a hand in front of his nose* You didn't go in your pants from being so scared of your next match, did you? *He yawned, blinking eyelids that suddenly felt heavy. It seemed like a nap would be just the perfect thing right now...*

*Ash growled at Gary at first before the gas started to take effect on him as well. He leaned against the lockers and started to slide down the lockers*

What's...going on...*Gary pressed a hand against his temple, trying to get his eyes to focus on Ash.* I don't hear any...jigglypuff music......*His vision faded to black as the sleeping gas stole away the last traces of awareness from his mind.*

*Smirking over the fallen trainers, the insidious villains of Team Rocket emerged from the shadows, masked against the powerful gas. With casual disregard for their captives comfort they stuffed Gary and Ash into heavy brown sacks and made off with them. Cutting the number of opponents in the tournament down would give their people a better chance, and they could steal some pokemon at the same time.*

*Ash started to wake up rubbing his head* Oh....where the hell am I? *He looked over to Gary* Gary? *He shook him a little* Gary?

*Groaning in his artificially induced slumber, Gary squeezes his eyes shut and then opens them- blinking as his vision clears to reveal the face of his rival looking down over him.* Ash? *He winced, reaching up to rub the side of his head- he had a terrible headache* What happened? *He sat up slowly, bracing his shoulder against the wall* Where are we?

I...I don't know....but I think....we are in serious trouble.

*The older trainer took a breath, looking around- it seemed like the classic example of a prison cell, with a single bare bed bolted to the wall and a toilet in one corner.* Has anyone come in to demand anything, or explain why we're here?

No...not yet....

*Gary sighed, knocking his head back against the wall* I've got a killer headache...*He opened one eye, looking at Ash* You okay?

*Ash nods a little* I have been awake for about an hour.

Mm...*Gary scooted a little to the side and pushed himself up into a standing position- swaying and putting his weight against the wall* Crap, it's hard to stand up...that must have been some strong gas. *He winced, edging over to the bed and flopping down onto it* Gah...hard like a rock. Wake me up if something happens. I'm going to sleep off this headache.

Ok Gary. *Ash blushed and looked over at Gary. He wanted to tell Gary that he loved him.*

*Within a few minutes Gary was asleep again. Oblivious to any feelings that Ash might have for him, his only concern was getting out of the prison they had been tossed into. But if no one had come to make demands or even explain where they were or why, he couldn't do a thing. He'd noticed right from the start that they were both missing their pokeballs.*

*Ash looked around the cell. I wonder where we are? And why we are here? He sighed and sat on the floor*

*After a further hour the door opened and two men in the uniform of Team Rocket entered, grabbing up Ash and hauling him away. They had plans for these boys- the knowledge that they had would help serve Team Rocket's ambitions of global domination.*

*Ash struggled* HEY! LET ME GO!! WHERE ARE WE GOING?

*The rocket goons carried Ash to a laboratory where he was strapped into a chair with metal bands for his wrists and ankles. A rocket doctor leered above him, holding a syringe with a wickedly long needle* This will hurt. *He informed Ash with a particular degree of amusement* But we need to give you this to find out what we want to know.

*Ash looked at the needles* What.....are you going to do me?

Just ask a few questions. *The doctor smirked, jabbing the needle into Ash's arm*

*Ash howled loudly as the needle was shoved in his arm*

That wasn't so bad, but we need information, not just screams. *Humming, the questioner began to go to work after waiting a minute for the truth serum to spread through the young trainers body* Tell us everything you know about Mew-Two!

Mew...two? *Ash started to pant*

It's simple. Tell us everything you know about him.

I....have no idea....

*The doctor raised an eyebrow* We have sources that link you directly to him.
Tell us, what do you know of Mewtwo?

I ...I...I don't know any mewtwo....

*The questioning continued in this fashion for an hour, with the doctor growing increasingly angry and frustrated as his questions brought only the same answer and lack of recognition from Ash. Finally he had him thrown back into his cell, and the other prisoner brought out. When that prisoner too produced no results, he was placed back in the cell with Ash*

*Ash shivered as he looked at Gary*

G...G...Gary?

*Rubbing his arm- which was sore from the injection, Gary sat down dejectedly on the bed, looking at Ash* Did they do the same for you as they did for me? Asking all these questions about Mewtwo. *He growled* I didn't need any injection. I could have told them I didn't know anything.


*Ash nodded as he blushed* I ...have something to tell you....

Hm? *Gary scooted back to rest against the wall, his legs hanging off the side of the bed* What's on your mind?

*Ash looked at Gary and kissed him gently on the lips*

*Gary blinked, his cheeks going red as a cherry. He jerked back, banging his head on the wall. Wincing, he rubbed the sore spot, staring at Ash* What was that for?! *He yelled, flustered and surprised.*

*Ash couldn't have stopped himself from speaking the truth* I...I...I love you...

*Gary thought he'd been blushing plenty before, but he hadn't known the meaning of the word until Ash said that to him. Flushed, his breathing picking up, he backed away until he was in the furthest corner from Ash, his hands against the wall as though he wanted to claw his way out* W-what are you saying Ash? You're crazy!

*Ash looked away embarrassed* I...have always had a respect for you...and I have loved you....since we were kids.

*That seemed to mollify Gary a bit. He lost some tension, his shoulders lowering- as though ashamed he reacted so badly to Ash's confession. He looked away as well, a little pout on his face* Well...thanks, I guess. I didn't know that.

*Ash sat on cold floor* Obviously you feel nothing for me.

That's not true! *Gary snapped back, annoyed and a little hurt by the obvious disappointment on Ash's face.*

*Ash's head snapped back and looked at Gary* What? Do you actually care for me?

*Gary glared at the floor. He'd never, ever been comfortable with feelings. Feelings were tricky things that you could get caught up in and through them you might forget more important things like training your pokemon. But there was a chemical compulsion in his blood that forced his lips to move.* ...ove...o...to.... *The faintest whisper passed to Ash incomplete words*

What was that? *Ash moved closer to Gary*

I...*Gary was sweating lightly, and he passed a hand over his forehead, a tremble visible in his muscles- he was fighting the drug.* I...don't dislike you. *He exhaled a shaking breath.* Not...at all...

*Ash smiled as he put his head onto Gary's shoulder* Do you....love me too?

*A grumpy pout was forming on Gary's lips again, and he looked away, his arms crossed over his chest* Alright, alright already! I...l..l...like you! I like you, okay? I like you!

*Ash decided to take a risk and kissed him again*

*Gary's eyes widened slightly and he began to draw back again- but this time instead of running away he relaxed, and his lips moved against Ash's as he returned the kiss.*

*Ash moaned as Gary returned the kiss*

*Gary was encouraged by the sound of Ash enjoying himself, and he broke the kiss, smiling a little shyly with their faces just inches apart* That was my first. *He said softly*

*Ash blushed realizing what he just did* Mine too... *He said warmly as he began to kiss at Gary
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#2
Is it your first lemon you ever wrote?

Well it's a good one, continue with your work ^^
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#3
One word, wow...

I have one complaint...

The whole

enter

space

between

everything

lol

sorry
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#4
i don't know how to say this without sounding like an asshole, so i'll just say it. Puncuate properly! put parenthesis infront and after speaking and don't put *'s around the rest

example#1:

*Ash tugged on his gloves* I know I can win this Pikachu

should look like:

Ash tugged on his gloves, "I know I can win this Pikachu."

and example #2:

Yo! Newbie! *Gary grinned, waving at Ash while making his way over, leaning up against the near row of lockers.* Better not lose this match. You're moving up pretty fast, aren't you?

should look like

"Yo! Newbie!" Gary grinned, waving at Ash while making his way over, leaning up against the near row of lockers, "Better not lose this match. You're moving up pretty fast, aren't you?"

and so forth. also anytime you start a new paragraph you should indent it. and it doesn't hurt to put who said what in the paragraph, like this.

example#3:

Ash tugged on his gloves, "I know I can win this Pikachu."

could have 'ash said' right after it like:

Ash tugged on his gloves, "I know I can win this Pikachu." Ash said.

but aside from it being written improperly, it's a great story, with a good plot and a lot of detail.

PS: sorry is i sounded a little mean in the begining, i just hate improper puncuation.
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#5
well Black Blade.

The whole enter is not that worse. It makes it easier to show when another one is speaking.
I don't make any comments about grammar stuff, coz I am not good in it myself
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#6
Excellent! The storyline was great! I must agree, however, with the others who have posted. Punctuation was kind of off, and the asterisks were really unnecessary. But I do not agree with the person who did not like the spacing between paragraphs. This is just my opinion, but I think it makes the stories easier to read. So. Are you gonna make a series? I think you should. I've RPed with someone recently, and that gave me an idea for a whole new series! But it'll have to be after the next one, I promised everyone a straight series. Well, keep up the good work! Da WOLFE
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#7
Who here want's to MST this....just curious.
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#8
I'll do it. Da WOLFE
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#9
what does mst stand for? i think i know what it means...honestly i've never heard the term before :oops:
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#10
MST is Mystery Science Theater, like the TV Show Mystery Science Theater 3000.
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