Revalisa Chronicals Ch1: A Rose in the Flower Garden

[Chaotic Phoenix]

Finally got this one done x.x'' It's one of the ones I was asking about a while back. I don't know if it'll all post or not in one post but... here it goes. Please read/review and if you think something is missing by all means PLEASE leave a comment saying what you think is missing lol... Would really help a lot there ^^' Also those from the Adventures of the DaD RP, if you wish to add a scene or a char to it I don't mind, just let me know the details and I'll add it.

Ended up doing it this way because I couldn't add the entire story in one shot here, got cut off towards the end and couldn't add a second post.

http://darkknightmatt.deviantart.com/art...-272498763 (Part 1)

http://darkknightmatt.deviantart.com/art...-272498994 (Part 2)

http://darkknightmatt.deviantart.com/art...-272499213 (Part 3 - Last)

[Chaotic Phoenix]

... Ok... *Takes out Assault Rifile and blasts off the legs of the bot that posted* Now to find a Moderator... >.>''

*Disregard this post, was referring to a bot that found it's way in here*

[Chaotic Phoenix]

I've taken down the story temporarily due to learning there are a TON of grammar errors in it. I'll repost it once the error is fixed but if a mod would delete this thread I would appreciate it. I'd like to start anew with this seeing that a stray bot got inside this earlier.

[Chaotic Phoenix]

Please delete this thread... kinda realize that for the reviews I'm looking for this isn't the area for it lol.