04-11-2010, 11:23 AM
I'm pretty sure there's only one 's' in Asesino's name, but whatever.
As usual, it took me a second scan to separate lyric from dialogue / writing. When I began reading, I forget I'm reading at all and run off to fairyland where the story takes place... Granted, this has gotten me in trouble during school on several occasions, but I feel it maximizes the reading experience. My main issue is, the character would randomly start saying verses... >.>
Also, Asesino's suggestion for dialogue is a good one, you may even want to get a friend and have each of you guys read your part.But, you know, with the stuff you write, that might be difficult without getting raised eyebrows.
As usual, it took me a second scan to separate lyric from dialogue / writing. When I began reading, I forget I'm reading at all and run off to fairyland where the story takes place... Granted, this has gotten me in trouble during school on several occasions, but I feel it maximizes the reading experience. My main issue is, the character would randomly start saying verses... >.>
Also, Asesino's suggestion for dialogue is a good one, you may even want to get a friend and have each of you guys read your part.But, you know, with the stuff you write, that might be difficult without getting raised eyebrows.