08-07-2006, 07:24 AM
Herr Mullen *sweat drop at earlier spelliing* ... I've changed the beginning to the Sorrow & Joy series... Do you think it's better?
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The sun shone down on the green plain, split in two by a dusty road; wandering from horizon to horizon. Two figures; the first dressed in a dirty smock, no more than a few rags sewn together with coarse threads, was definitely a man. Walking calmly with a large, broad bladed, light blue sword strapped to his back with a long strip of leather; the hilt decorated with several large crystals. The other figure will make one rub their eyes in disbelief; it was tall, with yellow fur that covered it
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The sun shone down on the green plain, split in two by a dusty road; wandering from horizon to horizon. Two figures; the first dressed in a dirty smock, no more than a few rags sewn together with coarse threads, was definitely a man. Walking calmly with a large, broad bladed, light blue sword strapped to his back with a long strip of leather; the hilt decorated with several large crystals. The other figure will make one rub their eyes in disbelief; it was tall, with yellow fur that covered it