08-20-2006, 01:24 AM
Where ever I go in the mainstream fandom, I hear praise for Red Rover. All I ever read of him was Behind The Scenes At The Digiartists Domain (a story I thought of parodying) and although it was thoroughly enjoyable, it really wasn't building up to the hype everyone was building about him. I expect his real talent shines in his End Game cerials (now avalable in frosted and chocolate varities), but I do not want to read something quite so long. So, I'm opting for a shorter series.
Red Rover's first chapter of "Princess Karaoke" fame, A Friend In Need.
This is a coupling with Gomamon in it. I love Gomamon: although he's got some awful later forms, he's the most fun out of all the Digimon. There's the reasoning behind my opening this page, to have my eyes battered out with bold clubs of text. It seems short, though, so hopefully it won't go on for long.
"Along" is one word. Already, Gomamon has used a trademark quick quip. Characterisation has been nailed, utterly. I can hear every character's voice in the speach. I don't think Joe would yell at Gomamon, though. He's just been thrown in jail: I think he'd be able to see Gomamon's point, even if he didn't entirely agree with it. He missed an indent. "We're", not "Where". I don't know how that happened. "Clambered" missed the "ed" off the end, too.
I do not need an advert for another lemon in the middle of a story outside a humourous context.
Several words are missing from the passage where Gomamon gets lost. I don't think that bit's very well done at all, actually.
The speech is all very good, very good indeed, but the narrative all seems a little off. Palmon is a bit plain-speaking, though.
Minty-fresh breath! Fantastic! Palmon has not neglected her oral duties in her spell as a princess.
I'm just kidding.
The sex scene seems very short, and lax on detail. It's okay if you just want perpetually aroused teenagers to get off, but it's not that impressive at all.
And then a sappy ending. It's your basic lemon, really. The characterisation was fantastic, but that's all that really made it distincitive.
Red Rover's first chapter of "Princess Karaoke" fame, A Friend In Need.
This is a coupling with Gomamon in it. I love Gomamon: although he's got some awful later forms, he's the most fun out of all the Digimon. There's the reasoning behind my opening this page, to have my eyes battered out with bold clubs of text. It seems short, though, so hopefully it won't go on for long.
"Along" is one word. Already, Gomamon has used a trademark quick quip. Characterisation has been nailed, utterly. I can hear every character's voice in the speach. I don't think Joe would yell at Gomamon, though. He's just been thrown in jail: I think he'd be able to see Gomamon's point, even if he didn't entirely agree with it. He missed an indent. "We're", not "Where". I don't know how that happened. "Clambered" missed the "ed" off the end, too.
I do not need an advert for another lemon in the middle of a story outside a humourous context.
Several words are missing from the passage where Gomamon gets lost. I don't think that bit's very well done at all, actually.
The speech is all very good, very good indeed, but the narrative all seems a little off. Palmon is a bit plain-speaking, though.
Minty-fresh breath! Fantastic! Palmon has not neglected her oral duties in her spell as a princess.
I'm just kidding.
The sex scene seems very short, and lax on detail. It's okay if you just want perpetually aroused teenagers to get off, but it's not that impressive at all.
And then a sappy ending. It's your basic lemon, really. The characterisation was fantastic, but that's all that really made it distincitive.