07-12-2006, 12:43 PM
These blasted openings are still killing me beyond my own understanding. Well, its more the prologue than anything else, and it keeps egging at me without respite. I've tried an action approach, but the action seems too vague in the beginning paragraph; characterization openings aren't really styled for the genre I'm writing for; now the setting introduction might shed some relief, and the entire story would flow right after I find that prologue--that opening worthy of this story!
->Follow Marshal Alistair Lorne and Marshal Caden Skoyva into the enigmatic prosession of Digi-armor digieggs, the Foundry's they protect, and the enemies they vei to conquer.
[The prologue sets before the main action in the opening: The Siezure of Digi-eggs in the Emperor's deplaining base and Marshal Skoyva's digimon Prelate, Nakia the Flamedramon. No destined children are being injected into this story as main characters, but terchiary ones.]
->Follow Marshal Alistair Lorne and Marshal Caden Skoyva into the enigmatic prosession of Digi-armor digieggs, the Foundry's they protect, and the enemies they vei to conquer.
[The prologue sets before the main action in the opening: The Siezure of Digi-eggs in the Emperor's deplaining base and Marshal Skoyva's digimon Prelate, Nakia the Flamedramon. No destined children are being injected into this story as main characters, but terchiary ones.]