06-24-2006, 04:26 PM
I never said that she was such a character in the show, and I've seen all of it -- I suggested ways to make her seem that way without making her act that way.
A well written story from a fixed point of view, whether it be in the first or the third person (I find third to be generally better for narrative, but first person narrative can be effective as well), will have the reader agreeing with the point of view espoused within the story and accepting that as the tone of the story. If well written, her innocent acts can seem very much to make the reader consider her a slut.
Perhaps after a training session with Mammoth, she slaps him on the butt, and your character reads this is a sexual action, not a sporting action of congratulations between team-mates. Perhaps a kiss or some such action will make her seem more forward or loose than your character feels is suitable. I'm suggesting not deviating too much from the show, but using your character's impressions of her and of what may indicate slutty behaviour.
To give an example... I made a conscious decision in my Future Lives series that Takeru was going to become an alcoholic. However I wanted to portray this through his eyes. And I started from the end:
Takeru says in the epilogue of 02 that he wrote books about their adventures, this is the "Adventure series" referred to. In this way I salute canon, even though all the rest of the story in outside of it.
Here I set up the perceptions from Takeru's point of view, but in the third person. I do not focus on HIkari, but on how Takeru felt. Yet I fell into the trap of TLI, which is the brother of TMI -- I didn't give enough information which prevents the reader from associating properly. But I'm not going to re-write it to fix that. In short, their lack of caution led to Hikari becoming pregnant, to which Takeru reacted poorly. Not the typical Takari story, but neither is it a Daikari. He begins to drink and is soon abusing alcohol, and lamenting the act even as he finds it to be his daily life: "I don't know why I'm doing this. I've been drunk every night since I found out, and I don't know why. I never even drank before then."
In this way I took a small bit of canon (the stories) and used them as a reason for Takeru to confront his past and his demons -- demons which the series would never even hint at. You can take the small bit of canon on Jinx and turn it into her own personality flaws and quirks which your character may perceive as her being slutty. Perhaps she's often kissing Gizmo for helping on her homework, or hugging Mammoth and Gizmo in ways your character finds inappropriate. Perhaps you even play with her character to make her seem more this way, but you do not need to forsake the series to create the image that she is slutty in your character's mind, or the reader's.
A well written story from a fixed point of view, whether it be in the first or the third person (I find third to be generally better for narrative, but first person narrative can be effective as well), will have the reader agreeing with the point of view espoused within the story and accepting that as the tone of the story. If well written, her innocent acts can seem very much to make the reader consider her a slut.
Perhaps after a training session with Mammoth, she slaps him on the butt, and your character reads this is a sexual action, not a sporting action of congratulations between team-mates. Perhaps a kiss or some such action will make her seem more forward or loose than your character feels is suitable. I'm suggesting not deviating too much from the show, but using your character's impressions of her and of what may indicate slutty behaviour.
To give an example... I made a conscious decision in my Future Lives series that Takeru was going to become an alcoholic. However I wanted to portray this through his eyes. And I started from the end:
Quote:"I was young, we made all sorts of mistakes then. Young folks do that too often. Unfortunately, I was more prone to them than the others." He looked down at the tape recorder, recording his thoughts and drinking. He'd sort the night out tomorrow, when he was sober. Then he'd try to write it into a story, even though he knew this would never fit his Adventure series.
Takeru says in the epilogue of 02 that he wrote books about their adventures, this is the "Adventure series" referred to. In this way I salute canon, even though all the rest of the story in outside of it.
Quote:"Hikari-chan," he whispered, leaning over to her. "Ai shiteru."
She hadn't seemed at all surprised as she kissed him. Her choice of a movie, and then she did this. He'd been so shocked at her simple response that he'd ignored the warning signs from their brothers. They had gone too fast, and been too reckless.
Here I set up the perceptions from Takeru's point of view, but in the third person. I do not focus on HIkari, but on how Takeru felt. Yet I fell into the trap of TLI, which is the brother of TMI -- I didn't give enough information which prevents the reader from associating properly. But I'm not going to re-write it to fix that. In short, their lack of caution led to Hikari becoming pregnant, to which Takeru reacted poorly. Not the typical Takari story, but neither is it a Daikari. He begins to drink and is soon abusing alcohol, and lamenting the act even as he finds it to be his daily life: "I don't know why I'm doing this. I've been drunk every night since I found out, and I don't know why. I never even drank before then."
In this way I took a small bit of canon (the stories) and used them as a reason for Takeru to confront his past and his demons -- demons which the series would never even hint at. You can take the small bit of canon on Jinx and turn it into her own personality flaws and quirks which your character may perceive as her being slutty. Perhaps she's often kissing Gizmo for helping on her homework, or hugging Mammoth and Gizmo in ways your character finds inappropriate. Perhaps you even play with her character to make her seem more this way, but you do not need to forsake the series to create the image that she is slutty in your character's mind, or the reader's.