Better Late than Never: The June 2006 Lemon Contest

[Nate Hunter]

June 2006 Contest: The Runner Up

Our runner up was a huge step up from the quality of DV85, and it was a close contest between him and our winner. But let's all hear it for Crimson Fox. His entry, "May I Take This Dance?" has a strange title relative to the content, but was a good and enjoyable read. The scores presented are as with DV85's -- my comments along with the combined scores.

Crimson Fox "May I Take This Dance?"
Overall Score: 81.5% - B-

A story worth entering in a contest, MITTD is an example of good writing, even if not great. So here are the scores.

Plot: 32/40 - 80%

Though the plot is just a set-up for the "knight in shining armor" routine, it is executed smoothly and quickly. If there were any hentai Digimon episodes, this would probably feel just like one of those. The plot isn't great, but it's solid enough to work well. And it is a bit different from the usual sex-fests we see, so that's good.

Characterization: 34/40 - 85%

Davis and Veemon are fairly spot on to their North American dub personalities and dialects, which is good. Renamon is an original characer, not the Renamon from Tamers, which I find to be a positive point (applying Renamon in the Adventure world is a bit of a plus in my book anyway, but that's got little to do with this score) since there's no crossover judgment about how she got there. Also positive, Lord Bakemon has a distinctive personality. Somehow reminds me of Oogie Boogie in the KH games (I haven't seen Nightmare Before Christmas, so I can't judge from that source). Worthy of a good score.

Semantics: 31/40 - 77.5%

Generally quite good, but a few points can detract where wording seems a bit awkward, whether it be a typo or just a wrong word. This particular flaw shows up in this story. Also, as much as I hate to judge semantics on a debatable issue, this also is a point I dislike budging from my own stance on -- mon/womon for Digimon gender are not, to my mind, acceptable, even though to many authors they are.

Lemon Scene: 33/40 - 82.5%

Of all the times... I curse being biased towards Renamon/Fladramon -- as well s a furry -- right now, as it will probably show in some bias on this score. It is well written and damn if it isn't good for a furry sex scene... Colorful and engaging, this is one of the better lemons I've read in a while. While even I'm losing my taste for writing such explicit stuff, this is almost inspiring to me for a future story I've got vaguely planned. Also, the fact that this was not just fucking, but actually making love is an excellent positive to this story. Too often the thought of making love is just any time people have sex, and though that may be all the slang means, the words speak deeper than that.

Note to author: Orgasmic fluids soak into sheets and become almost invisible under normal light. Yes, even blue sheets. Experience speaking here, since we gotta wank somewhere...

Overall Writing: 33/40 - 82.5%

This is certainly a far better read than DV85's "The Break Up". However, semantic and plot issues weaken the story as a whole slightly, but it's still a good solid read. I strongly recommend it for any furries or Renamon fans here.

And last up is our winner and Champion...