I hate writing shit; it is so stupid

[Wisemon]

Next on the chopping block, Luminous Blane's "You Make My Heart Soar on Digital Wings." I've decided to give the two chapters separate reviews, because they are of different quality.

First of all, the text is annoying. What is this, a .txt file? a pasted email? Next time, attach your .doc file to the email. Here's the major gripe with Chapter 1: The characterization is completely off, especially for Kouji. Where's the loner attitude? Where's the anger? Kouji would never "confess" any feelings to Zoe unless she said something first. Another thing, the Russian yo instead of e in Zoe, that's just stupid. Oh, and Takuya's words of wisdom, not bad, but Takuya's not edgy enough to phrase something that way. The lemon scene was okay, not great, but much like the rest of the chapter, it felt like Kouji and Zoe just replaced two other names. My grade: 5/10.

Chapter 2: Now we get into a decent sounding plot, with some nice lines for Bokomon and Neemon. The description of the ship and the adventure was really good. Kouji's packing was definitely in character. Here's where it goes out of character:

"Takuya and JP slapped him hard on the back, while Zo