07-03-2006, 09:37 AM
It's a very nice writing. My only real gripe with it iswith guilmon's last line. "I hope you don't think any less of me" is just too wordy for the Guilmon we know.
I'd suggest expanding on Impmon's sensation. After all, Guilmon's work must have been some kind of pleasureable to bring him to orgasm.
I'd suggest expanding on Impmon's sensation. After all, Guilmon's work must have been some kind of pleasureable to bring him to orgasm.