I Just Love You ~REBORN AND UPDATED~

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08-16-2003, 10:16 PM

That, in my humble opinion, was the best part to date! It's extremely well written, and the tension is very well drawn out. The last sentence cracked me up, because it was so completely unexpected.

As for the style change: Well, what I meant was that up until the part before today's everything was quite peaceful and harmless. Not much happened (Kari asked Tai whether he'd take her to the fair, they went to the fair and looked around the fair) and you mostly concentrated on the characters, what they feel and think, how they move. And then, suddenly, with the introduction of the water gun game and Kari's determination to win it, strong tension and action enter the story. That's a style change of sorts in my opinion...

...oh yeah, and who kicked Kari's arse? Hmmm. Let me think.
It was...
It was...
BATMAN!!!

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