Destruction series reviews??

[DragonMasterX]

Yeah, I've gotten complaints of the lemon scene before. I'd remove it but the plot almost calls for it.

My dear friend, you don't have to remove the Lemon scene. You yourself seem to point out they indeed are lovers in those angelical forms, so even they are planning the world's destruction by having sex (ironic), they should have their moment of care, love and passion, wouldn't you agree? So, you don't need to remove this even if the whole story depended on it, you just have to improve it.

And now, Chapter 8.

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They were fighting for who gets to* go and butcher the Digimon inside it first. But as they got inside a single Digimon eating on some food*2 greeted them. It was Silvermon.

*-If you started in past, then you should continue in past so it ends: "They were fighting for who got to,"

*2-If you want to use ''on'' then you shouldn't use: ''Eat.'' as the main verb, but: "Munching." or "Chewing." If not, then remove "On." from the sentence.

The first human started to run towards Silvermon and slashed his right hand towards Silvermon who easily dodged it.

You could vary, so it sounds better. Use any of these examples to replace the name of Silvermon: "Digimon.", "Dragon.", "His enemy.", "The foe." or even: "His possible meal."

[quote=MISTER BIG T]Silvermon smiled and tossed the bowl into air and pushed both of his hands index and middle fingers into the human