07-19-2006, 03:57 AM
DragonMasterX Wrote:A pity you couldn't add a Lemon scene here.
I thought of descriping the rape in detail but thought it'd not really sound realistic for Patamon to descripe that hard. And I also thought the lemony parts in next one would make up for the lack of them in this one. :cry:
Can you give me an example on how to improve my semantics and such, like I made with you by posting the original writing and then the way it'd be better? I sometimes get confused with all this, sorry. :D