Need Help On Openings

[Wisemon]

You're not going to like what I'm about to tell you, nor are you likely to find it very constructive. Your biggest problem with openings is that you're starting with your original characters. When you're writing fan fiction, and you want to hook the reader, ideally, you should start with your readers' favorite characters, or at least ones with which the reader is familiar. As you progress, you can enter your original characters.