05-29-2006, 08:28 PM
That was really, very good. And they told me there was no hope for newer authors! My dear fellow, that was really, very powerful. You used "wear" insted of "where" and put a double "a" in "boat" at the end, but the story itself is very well written. You display empathy with the soldiers, and use a very good similie (I'm sorry; I never spell that one right) with the gnat and the bullets. Now, get even better. I want to set you a challange; write me a good quality Digimon fiction for Nate's competition. Enter that thing.