05-25-2006, 11:18 AM
Hell, I do stories from just human soldiers' perspectives all the time. Does that seem like it might be influencing it?
And take the title into consideration, 'My First Piece' or something like that... :roll:
EDIT: I just read the INTRO to another story...I realize I'm lacking any metaphors, and I don't seem to be conveyin a mood in the story...but at least I got the grammar right :D
DOUBLE EDIT: The perspective is supposed to be third-person, yet its knowledge of the situation is supposed to be linked to Alex's...I think I should have made it more ethnic ....'Raul/Hans/Pierre was like any other boy his age'
TRIPLE EDIT (Shouldn't I just make a new post?): This 'chapter' (if I even continue this) was almost entirely introductional. So far, we know
Alex is special (oh, really?)
Flamedramon is badass (If I had my way, this chapter would be docile)
QUADRUPLE EDIT: I love emoticons :D :) :( :shock: :? 8) :cry: :oops: :P :x 
:roll: 
:arrow: 
:!: :?:
And take the title into consideration, 'My First Piece' or something like that... :roll:
EDIT: I just read the INTRO to another story...I realize I'm lacking any metaphors, and I don't seem to be conveyin a mood in the story...but at least I got the grammar right :D
DOUBLE EDIT: The perspective is supposed to be third-person, yet its knowledge of the situation is supposed to be linked to Alex's...I think I should have made it more ethnic ....'Raul/Hans/Pierre was like any other boy his age'
TRIPLE EDIT (Shouldn't I just make a new post?): This 'chapter' (if I even continue this) was almost entirely introductional. So far, we know
Alex is special (oh, really?)
Flamedramon is badass (If I had my way, this chapter would be docile)
QUADRUPLE EDIT: I love emoticons :D :) :( :shock: :? 8)
:cry: :oops: :P :x :roll: :arrow: :!: :?: