05-03-2006, 03:09 AM
I want to be clear. I'm being harsh, and I'm the first to admit it. I see a lot, a LOT of good stuff in there. Good description, very nice erotic writing. But there's also some stuff that is not up to par with the rest.
I don't think it'd be a good thing for you, as far as your writing is concerned, to tell you that everything's great and OK. There's room for improvement and I see potential for great stuff from you, so now is not the time to tell you to kick back and relax. Quite the contrary, it's time to work and improve.
Basically,I'm not being harsh just to be harsh; I'm being harsh because I think you can take it and become a great writer. By all mean, if you want to go all nitpicky on my stuff, feel free to do so. If you're interested, I canhelp and do grammar/spelling/punctuation copyediting.
I don't think it'd be a good thing for you, as far as your writing is concerned, to tell you that everything's great and OK. There's room for improvement and I see potential for great stuff from you, so now is not the time to tell you to kick back and relax. Quite the contrary, it's time to work and improve.
Basically,I'm not being harsh just to be harsh; I'm being harsh because I think you can take it and become a great writer. By all mean, if you want to go all nitpicky on my stuff, feel free to do so. If you're interested, I canhelp and do grammar/spelling/punctuation copyediting.