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A preview to my newest story (Zephyrmon/Flamedramon)
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05-02-2006, 04:31 AM (This post was last modified: 05-02-2006, 10:39 AM by Wisemon.)
It's a pretty good battle scene. I especially enjoyed the Digivolving/Digi-Armor descriptions. The Tuskmon come in a little suddenly, but I guess that was the point. Certainly, the dimension shifting thing has been done before, but you came up with an okay method. I think it would be cooler if you said that the 02 universe really was entirely within Sakkakumon. You had some trouble with maintaining tenses. You should go back and edit that.
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